Storms at Weathertop. Shadow IV- Discussion Thread

[Valandil]

gordis said:

So, Val, - could you please finish Gandalf-Gimilbeth little scene?

And where is Serenoli?

Oh Gordis, I'm sorry... I didn't realize you were waiting on me to take it from there.

In fact, I almost think it didn't need 'finishing'. I didn't have anything significant for Gandalf to say. I think he just wanted to exert a little of his attention Gimilbeth's way... but again, I don't think he says much.

Now - I COULD try to come up with something, if you like, and if you think it would make a better end to that little sequence. I just figured that it's going to be a LOOONG winter at Amon Sul, so a little suspense may serve us well.

Tell me what you think. At least now, my mind is going to work on possibilities, when up to this moment, I had thought it pretty well laid to rest (I don't think we need a constant 'blow-by-blow' account of everything that happens over the course of this game. We leave some to the imagination, cover some in flashbacks or memories, etc).

So - I'm pretty willing to go either way. I'll just have to think for a little inspiration if I'm going to write something on it.

[Gordis]

I think I can finish the post myself - if I get your directions. So, Gandalf has nothing to say? Then I will make Gimilbeth bolt to her room under some pretext, 'tis all. Let him figure out why she was so frightened.

[Serenoli]

Rian... afraid i didn't notice your message. Am going post-haste to correct it.

[Valandil]

gordis said:

I think I can finish the post myself - if I get your directions. So, Gandalf has nothing to say? Then I will make Gimilbeth bolt to her room under some pretext, 'tis all. Let him figure out why she was so frightened.

I went ahead and tried something. Is it satisfactory? If not, we can change it or remove it. I just wanted to help us keep things going along.

[Gordis]

Thank you, Val - I appreciate your help.
I suggest you add an extra sentence at the beginning describing their way from the tower to Gimilbeth's corridor, because, as it is there is too abrupt transition between Gimilbeth's stark fear and her plea to Melkor at the end of my post and her rather sarcastic thought about Barund at the beginning of yours. It seems they have walked a long way between these two points.

I suggest something like that (please fill in the details):

"Lord Mithrandir, however, led Gimilbeth along, without trying to engage her in a conversation. They passed ... climbed... turned etc. until they entered the long corridor of the East wing. Gimilbeth started to relax with the door of her room finally in sight."
And then your post.

Is it OK?

[Rian]

serenoli said:

Rian... afraid i didn't notice your message. Am going post-haste to correct it.

thank you - I like the correction Sounds like Callon to me.

[Gordis]

So Serenoli, Duilin - who is to post next? Maybe you would care to continue Hurgon's post a bit, letting him tell some of the story, Serenoli?

And what about Beleg-Herunarth first meeting, Duilin and Val?

[Duilin]

Although obviously the last post was Serenoli's, the way Serenoli added the edits I asked for puts the ball in Hurgon's/Serenoli's court for the continuation, I think. As a request, it'd be good if Hurgon talks about the painting of Tarniel, and what it's for, as well as any witchcraft on Gimilbeth's part.

For Beleg and Herunarth, I don't have much of a sense of Herunarth - I'd be happy for Val to get into that part of it. Herunarth should, I think, be somewhat wary of Beleg, as the grandson of his father's enemy, but presumably they make friends anyway. I could try to write something, if Val doesn't want to.

Oh, P.S., there's a Barund/Aegnor/Amdír conversation going on, as well. I don't know if we actually need to show it, though - I might just have Aegnor report on its contents later.

[Gordis]

Val, thank you for adding to Gandalf's post . I have edited Gimilbeth's accordingly.

We seem somewhat at a stand-still, so I have inserted a placeholder for Serenoli to continue Hurgon's post. Now, I think, Duilin can either post Aegnor- Barund talk, or make Aegnor report to Galphant about it.

Also, Val and Duilin, please, decide who will post about Herunarth and Beleg. It is not necessary to stick it all in one post, by the way - you can each post your portion. Maybe Beleg will take his new pal around to see the fortress? - though it is better done next morning.

I will try to post for Gimilbeth.

[Serenoli]

Hey, guys. I am shocked to see I have not been here in 9 days... but I was caught sick by a very infectious disease, which has gone the rounds of my entire family... and I did write a few posts, but unfortunately, a post I wrote for Odare has completely disappeared. I just cannot remember where I saved it or whether I saved it at all, and ooh, I hate rewriting. But I will, soon enough.

I am also trying to write Hurgon's tale down, only it seems to be a brief condensation of everything that he has witnessed so far - there are precious few scenes Hurgon has without Gimilbeth involved! - and I am spending a lot of time trying to be as concise as Gandalf was to the hobbits in the prologue, and interesting without being repetitive. Oh, and thanks for the suggestions, Duilin, I'll keep them in mind. And I think I will PM you before I post it, because I am very good at writing down Hurgon's bit, but I'm not sufficiently sure of how your characters would respond... But my posts will both be up within tomorrow or the day after...

And great posts on both threads, ALL... and, oh, I'm glad Sakaaf got out of it alive... and while certainly, he's been over-worked and given minimal respect, the necklace treated him better than the others.