Writing the Prologue

[Witch-king of Angmar]

gordis said:

Ahem... thanks guys, but doesn't anyone else wish to try his hand as part-time Gandalf?

Gordis, as they say in show business, "Your act is a hard one to follow." I know I couldn't come up to your level on this. You are doing outstandingly well as Gandalf.

[Gordis]

OK, then, I am posting a continuation - logged as "scribe", to allow non-mods to work on the text as well. Password for scribe is : Rhudaur

I have corrected the first post as well, so I am reposting all anew.

I am threading on Val's territory, so your input is especially appreciated, Val.

[Serenoli]

Gordis and Angmar, I would have loved to play the part-time Gandalf, only you guys are doing it so well. Besides, truth be told, my grasp of the division of Arnor, and the Palantir, Angmar, all that, is very very dim. The Prologue is dispelling some of that... thats why I am loving it.

By the way, cool Gandalf...

[Witch-king of Angmar]

"Besides, truth be told, my grasp of the division of Arnor, and the Palantir, Angmar, all that, is very very dim. The Prologue is dispelling some of that... thats why I am loving it. " - Serenoli

Gordis has an outstanding understanding of the archives, and is doing a masterful job with the story. This sort of writing is tricky if you attempt to do any filling out of the archives, and there is so much to fill out. They are nothing more than bare bones, not much more than a plot outline.

I am thoroughly enjoying Gordis' telling of the tale. It sort of reminds me of sitting around the campfire, listening to a good storyteller.

[Gordis]

So, I am finally posting the end of the prologue. I again use scribe to allow everyone to edit the text. Please, beta it, ye native English speakers.

Also all changes, suggestions etc are welcome.

At the end I have heavily borrowed from Valandil's fic. Val - perhaps you wish to expand?rewrite it a little?

Is there something else we need to incorporate?

Are there some parts that are too much of a spoilers?

Also, rereading the whole, I think Val was correct about the sun at the bridge - the passage should look more realistic with the sun low and its rays almost horizontal -and not beating upon the bridge from above. If someone can alter the description for me, I will be most grateful. It is a bit beyond my skill.


So, please, read, correct and critisize!

[Witch-king of Angmar]

Gordis, I have just read the prologue and I found only one tiny error, which I corrected. Not quite certain about the splanting sun on the bridge. Perhaps Val could handle that.

That was a tremendously well-written prologue! I found myself getting caught up in it and enjoyed myself very much.

[Gordis]

I am glad you liked my prologue, Angmar. Thanks for the corrections.

Val, I would like you to read the prologue before we post it. Please - there are some parts borrowed directly from your fic.

Now - what would we want as an avatar for the NK Writers on OSA?

[Witch-king of Angmar]

gordis said:

Now - what would we want as an avatar for the NK Writers on OSA?

Gordis, that is a difficult one. A group scene from a medieval painting or a scene from a film with a crowd is a possibility. Right now I'm seeing a collection of motley cuthroats representing the characters I like to write about. ;D

[Valandil]

gordis said:

I am glad you liked my prologue, Angmar. Thanks for the corrections.

Val, I would like you to read the prologue before we post it. Please - there are some parts borrowed directly from your fic.

Now - what would we want as an avatar for the NK Writers on OSA?

Hey guys... I DO want to start contributing more again. Things are a bit hard in the near future though. I had at least another comment to make on the first portion of the Prologue - and still have to read the last installment. I think we want to be careful that it doesn't get too bogged down... the Prologue should be an introduction to the story, and doesn't have to go into great detail. I'll try to get with it when I'm able (RL job, family, church demands have increased lately, I'm trying to exercise and still want to wrap up my "Visitors" story - and also we just had a family matter that required extra attention).

One thing I could try to do... Gordis has mentioned a few times about my historical account that this story began with. Instead of a link to where I have it posted otherwise, I could just post it here. I should probably highlight the parts that pertain to our story - but maybe I'd just post all the rest along with it (but everyone has to understand that it's a "working document" - so if I change my mind on some things later, don't get mad at me ). I held out hope for a long time of integrating Celebrimbor's Cardolan history in place of my own, but I just haven't gotten the time to sit with it and work out the kinks. Maybe later I can work that in - especially if he rejoins us and things get going with Cardolan.

Also - I do want to re-post my other Dunedain materials, but having reviewed them, I'd like to edit them a bit first.

So... I'm hoping to get to where I can be more responsive... but I'm not there just yet. I still check in at least once per day to read - at least the short posts. ;D

[Gordis]

Val, I am glad you are still around. Please, first-thing - just try to check my prologue. Log in as "scribe" and alter what you think need be altered using different font color.

And sure, please repost your story here and your Dunedain notes as well... but please, first the Prologue. We really need to start posting our story soon - maybe we shall get more players this way.